Traveled
Desperate
Lapse
I so want to make these three words into a Haiku. Yet no matter which way I position them they don't quite say what I mean ...
Traveled a desperate lapse ... I have for the past 20 weeks ...
A desperate lapse traveled with me ... that too ...
A lapse too traveled became desperate ... Mmmm ...
The traveled, desperate, lapse diminished ...
Resurgance propells me from a well traveled, desperate, lapse!
... if you get what I mean ...
Thursday 28 August 2008
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damn those 5-7-5 syllable constraints!!!!!!
great job Red!
I was just reading a comment you recently left me, You are always so kind! :)
uh... nope, I think you lost me.
Well, I can't fault you for effort :-)
I fail with haiku nearly every time. I've a phobia concerning formula poetry - I'm sure of it.
I see no lapse in your creativity here. Appreciate you allowing me to travel this road with you. Nothing desperate in this attempt that I can see. ;-)
You did good here!
Write away, woman!
yeah, what susan sed... a rather delightful journey through the looking glass.. did you try the big pill first or the small pill?
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